tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-376730382413238161.post4022713656825658302..comments2019-01-31T12:32:36.812-08:00Comments on Mercy Matinee: Not ThereSharon Rose Thomashttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05978390292247630316noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-376730382413238161.post-69634019231312763422014-10-26T06:45:51.545-07:002014-10-26T06:45:51.545-07:00I enjoyed reading your poem...the first line got m...I enjoyed reading your poem...the first line got me...she is not there....annell4https://www.blogger.com/profile/07629830133868270690noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-376730382413238161.post-65329434099700962912014-08-29T20:08:52.720-07:002014-08-29T20:08:52.720-07:00Interesting diverse images build a solid poem of l...Interesting diverse images build a solid poem of love/loss/ and puzzlement. Liked it.Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-376730382413238161.post-40108669732759148802014-08-29T19:51:31.988-07:002014-08-29T19:51:31.988-07:00def an interesting write...it took a little decyph...def an interesting write...it took a little decyphering, but i think i followed the story...i thought for a bit you were chaining your lines with the end line beginning line repetitions, which was cool...and i have def crossed a few mental chasms...smiles.Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-376730382413238161.post-35181877953177534372014-08-29T16:26:18.633-07:002014-08-29T16:26:18.633-07:00Sorry! I am a Norwegian, not a profound reader of ...Sorry! I am a Norwegian, not a profound reader of English, and I do not understand a bit of it.Vacciniushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03631121664181976045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-376730382413238161.post-72132486701122033432014-08-29T15:18:55.994-07:002014-08-29T15:18:55.994-07:00I specially like the third stanza and that hopeful...I specially like the third stanza and that hopeful ending - Good work on the quatrain ~<br />Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-376730382413238161.post-27762113185476155422014-08-29T14:53:38.478-07:002014-08-29T14:53:38.478-07:00I changed it to chasm for ease of read. Then no on...I changed it to chasm for ease of read. Then no one would have to look it up. Both words actually fit I think? Do you think?<br /> Sharon Rose Thomashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05978390292247630316noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-376730382413238161.post-5489171618815048602014-08-29T13:38:37.902-07:002014-08-29T13:38:37.902-07:00Being with someone who is neither here nor there c...Being with someone who is neither here nor there can be very disturbing.Gabriellahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09968615376035959259noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-376730382413238161.post-62603219741600159812014-08-29T13:26:40.422-07:002014-08-29T13:26:40.422-07:00an interesting write... the bastions...her hope of...an interesting write... the bastions...her hope of having both rocks of gibraltar, the being not there and all that goes with it... sometimes it takes a bit until we're able to cross those chasms..Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-376730382413238161.post-39870950239442395192014-08-29T12:59:55.316-07:002014-08-29T12:59:55.316-07:00The game of love is not always fair.. there are so...The game of love is not always fair.. there are some that get it all.. leaving havoc in their wake... great use of the form.. the repetitions enhance it to get the message through.brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-376730382413238161.post-43130347760684864042014-08-29T11:02:40.029-07:002014-08-29T11:02:40.029-07:00nice lines :)nice lines :)Sumana Royhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17333363799083094084noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-376730382413238161.post-24113615928888137542014-08-29T10:48:21.783-07:002014-08-29T10:48:21.783-07:00It is good that she now has an idea of her future,...It is good that she now has an idea of her future, and I do hope that she attains her hope.Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-376730382413238161.post-29575893799223240762014-08-29T08:25:11.726-07:002014-08-29T08:25:11.726-07:00well done on the form. I like the repeated words ...well done on the form. I like the repeated words at the end of line 3/beginning of line 4 in the first 3 stanzas. One question: in stanzas III and IV, did you mean to use the word "chiasm" or did you want "chasm"?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-376730382413238161.post-25517138953272411342014-08-29T08:14:05.583-07:002014-08-29T08:14:05.583-07:00wow... this form can apply to any topicwow... this form can apply to any topicWolfsrosebudhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17295258422523621134noreply@blogger.com